Chapter Eight
Me, My Novel, Progress Reports April 10th, 2008This is a watershed chapter, plain and simple. A lot of the story gets laid out before Rowan (though she understands little of it) and as the reader continues on with the novel they will (hopefully) see many of the story threads leading back to Chapter Eight.
With so much information needing to be crammed into this chapter, it was a challenge for me to avoid long, heavy blocks of exposition and info-dumps (the bane of any Fantasy novel, it seems). The most obvious and effective way to relay information like this is dialogue and I took that concept and ran with it. In fact, the majority of this chapter simply consists of Rowan, Fitheal and another character sitting huddled in a room, deep in the bowels of a Cathedral, shooting the shit.
Of course, there’s a lot more to the chapter than that. Rowan’s now fully immersed in the Faerie world and her life is looking anything but stable. She’s also told, in no uncertain terms, that if she value’s her life she’ll drop the search for her son. But, as any self-respecting, spunky heroine would attest to, those just aren’t very compelling terms. Rowan doesn’t exactly put her Fey host in his place, but I was surprised by how well she was able to hold her own in the argument.
I expect that when I sit down to edit (a process I’ve started, actually) that this chapter will require quite a bit of revision. There’s a definite balancing act between revealing enough to hook the reader into the main story and not giving too much away, and that’s going to require a very close look when I go back to reread the chapter in the future. I’m confident that I’ve got a good solid skeleton for the chapter, all the pieces are there, I’ll just have to spend some time moving things around, add in some fat and try to get it looking more like a living, breathing thing than a stumbling zombie.
Through Bended Grass is split up into three parts - First, Second and Third Act, you know the deal - and Chapter Eight marks the end of the first part. The story’s been set up, the ball’s rolling and things start getting messy. From this point onward the Fey world, and it’s relationship to our own, opens wide and Rowan doesn’t look back as she’s shoved in head first. Her story flits back and forth between the Feylands and our world and each has its own sights to see for the reader.
On another note, the excerpt that I’ve constantly promised is done. It’s all edited, but still I dilly-dally about putting it up here for everyone to see. I suppose part of it is fear that I’ll get torn apart, but I need to be confident in the story I’m telling.
I’ve also put aside editing the first 8 chapters in lieu of getting on to Chapter Nine. The desire to tell the story is burning much too brightly for me to put it aside for editing. On top of this, my brother is currently travelling through Ireland and just visited a major Irish monument that plays an important role in Chapter Nine, so that has me all kinds of motivated!
April 10th, 2008 at 2:12 pm
POST IT. lol. If you do get torn apart, more to the good. If there are weaknesses that you need to address, what greater boon than to find out now so you can impliment it from chapter 9 on, rather than having to go back and fix it in editing on 30+ chapters. This way you’ll only have 8 chapters to fix if there is some major mistake you are making. Just one man’s opinion tho. or you could always send it to people upon request…..in which case, i request a copy of the excerpt.
thats it for now, take care
April 12th, 2008 at 1:37 pm
Sean,
You’re totally right, I need to stop being a complete pansy about it and just trust in my writing and the story. Expect it up before the end of the weekend.
Also, I checked out your poetry over at TBF and, though I don’t really feel qualified to give proper criticism to poetry (I’ve always been of the mind that no one can be right or wrong about poetry and that its quality is in the eye of the beholder), but I definitely enjoyed it. Keep up the good work. Poetry was something I had a lot of fun playing around with in highschool, but as time has moved on I’ve drifted away from it.
It certainly is a terrific way to let your mind explore the possibilities provided by the language, eh?
April 14th, 2008 at 8:26 am
yeah, i haven’t wrote any poetry since i graduated junior college back in 01-02, except a few romantic endeavors to woo some young hearts, you know how it goes. lol, i feel qualified to criticize other people’s poetry but i don’t, being quailified to do something and having th right to do something don’t always go hand in hand.
look forward to the excerpt
April 14th, 2008 at 9:08 am
Sean,
Check your email.
April 17th, 2008 at 10:59 am
Hey Aidan,
Just letting you know that I received your email with the chapters. You should send me the first three, as those are the ones the agents/editors will be reading.
I wrote you an email, sending you my first four, but the email bounced back. *shrugs* I’ll have to try it again when I get back to Seattle.
Keep it rolling!
April 17th, 2008 at 11:27 am
Aidan,
You should post it! Remember, criticism is just another oppritunity for you to tell people to go to… just kidding.
Shawn posted, and everyone’s replies - even if they didn’t like it or ripped it to shreds - either helped him strenghten his story or get views that he might not have considered before. All great tools to a writer.
And I know what you mean about 1. Being too pumped to write to be able to edit and 2. Not wanting to edit until it’s “done”.
In the story I’m working on I refuse to do any edits - heck I don’t even fix spelling; because if I start doing that then I won’t write anything at all. I plan on taking Act I and editing it before starting ACT II and so on, but only as a specific break in writing.
This, hopefully, will allow me to come up with fresh views and ideas in the back of my mind. You know, self discovery and all that.
So, I say, go for it, post the exerpt. Besides, it will satisify my own selfish desires to read your work.
Peace!
Mark
April 17th, 2008 at 2:06 pm
Shawn,
As I mentioned in the email, I’m just working on a final edit on the first three chapters and then will hopefully have it all changed in the computer by the weekend. Perhaps Sean and yourself will be able to suggest which of the chapters you think would make the best excerpt for my readers here.
Jax,
You’re definitely right about it being a terrific way to recieve criticism from a broad range of readers. Because of A Dribble of Ink, especially, my range of readers for this blog is probably marginally higher than other similar blogs, which in many ways can be a bit of a double edged sword.
If I publish an excerpt, it happens to be terrific, and an author/agent stumbles across it, that’s terrific and could only be good for my career - somewhere down the line they may see my name on a manuscript and remember that I wrote a pretty good excerpt. One the other hand, if I publish an excerpt and it’s of subpar quality, that same agent might see my name on their slush pile and remember that I wrote a pretty shitty excerpt.
It’s a pretty dodgy excuse for dawdling around posting the excerpt and it should, in fact, encourage me to get off my ass and do it. But it is something that’s in the back of my mind.
That all being said, I am confident in the story and will be posting an excerpt sooner rather than later.
Thanks for the continued interest, Mark.
April 18th, 2008 at 8:04 am
No worries.
I can completely understand your concern; I’m pretty confident though, that given your experience with other authors and the craft in general, the excerpt would be anything but shit.
However, I’m on the outside looking in. You have a completely different perspective on it.
Heck, maybe send it to Shawn and see what he thinks first? He’s got a good eye for things.
Have a good weekend,
Mark